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DeWolfe Apts., on the Feast of Ste. Jane Frances de Chantal

Meg wrote me Walter/Una fic! (Walter Blythe, Anne and Gilbert's second son, and Una Meredith, for you who are less familiar with the Montgomery opus.) It broke my heart to read it but in a good way. You should all read it too: spring letters and spring tears.

I had something else to say, but I forgot. So instead, to the fic! I think today's little experiment in writing turned out a bit odd; it's not quite as coherent as I'd like it to be. It's at an awkward length: too long to be a tight, concise drabble but too short to be a properly developed fic. Maybe I'll figure out a second part later?

Interdependence
Dedicated to [livejournal.com profile] schwimmerin, with whom I will never run out of words to share, written or otherwise

Their first year apart, when he was studying medicine in Tokyo and she was abroad in England, she wrote him constantly. Page-long emails punctuated with emoticons, typed in the dead of night when she was supposed to be reading Marlowe and Shaw (he wondered how she maintained her respectable GPA, but decided not to inquire about it). Brief, half-misspelled text messages sent to his handphone at odd hours of the day (the time zones separated them as effectively as the continents and oceans between them). Tattered postcards with worn edges, their return address half-concealed with exotic stamps, sent sporadically when she traveled to Cornwall, to Stonehenge, to the white cliffs of Dover ("they really are white, like bones," she wrote incredulously in a hasty scribble). He wrote back to her in pages and pages of typewritten letters on plain white stationery, posted in envelopes he borrowed from his father's desk.

By the second year, the deluge of words exchanged between them had dribbled to a halt. In the third and fourth year, he meticulously wiped the dust off the box where he had saved the postcards when he cleaned his desk once a week but no longer opened it. (At times, he even forgot why the box was there.) When he graduated from college, he did not know that she had returned to Japan several months before.

They saw each other by chance one afternoon, while passing through a park in their hometown. She was wearing sweatpants and had an mp3 player strapped to her wrist. He was walking home from an interview, feeling hot and stifled in his shirt and tie. Her head turned as she moved past him, and then they both jerked to a stop.

"Souichirou?" she asked, taking off her headphones.

"Yukino?" he echoed, his eyes wide.

They stared at each other, unable to speak: too many words and too long a silence. He attempted conversation, with a polite smile, "I received your postcards."

"I know. I have your letters somewhere, sitting in a pile in one of my bags. I kept every one." She studied him with a little frown on her face, with a sardonic arch of the eyebrow.

He continued smiling but she continued to look, her glance piercing through him and into him like a fine dagger. The smile faltered and faded. He said, "How...how have you been?"

She wrinkled her nose. "Me? Well, I suppose I've changed. Or I thought I changed." She waved her hand vaguely in the air as if to trace the trajectory of her transformation.

"Oh, I see."

They stood in the middle of the street, frozen in each other's gaze, while the other pedestrians swerved around them.

"And you?"

He thought back to the years of silence between them, and the days seemed to merge into a blur. He couldn't think. He shook his head, as if to clear it, but all he could focus on was her, the reality of her.

"I'm the same," he said with some surprise, "same as I ever was."

She looked at him with a familiar certainty in her eyes. "Yes, me too."

They stood there past sunset and far into the night, unable to move apart.

END

(Er, yes, I know that you haven't watched this series at all, Jenny, but I think you don't really need any background to read it. ^_^)

Yours &c.

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Date: 2005-08-19 03:55 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tryogeru.livejournal.com
Um...I am not good at any kind of criticism, but I will try. I like the later bits better than the beginning bits..I guess 'cause I have always liked your dialogue best... Not to say that the beginning was bad, 'cause it certainly introduced me to who these people were (>_>), but I guess the loads of parentheses confused me a little.. Um.. It wasn't sappy! It was nice and decently sad. ^___^ Clearly expressing transform-ness, well except the last bit, where I guess they're still sticking together and not so much melting.. I have no idea what I'm talking about..::runs away::

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Date: 2005-08-19 01:19 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] troisroyaumes
Heh, on reading this again, I really do think you have a point about the parentheses. I was not too good with consistency in this fic, was I? Thank~ you for the comment Tryo-chan. XD

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Date: 2005-08-19 04:05 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] moderntime.livejournal.com
Somehow this reminds me very much of the Murakami story about almost meeting the 100% perfect girl, it has that same undertone of regret for the might-have-beens.

He thought back to the years of silence between them, and the days seemed to merge into a blur. He couldn't think. He shook his head, as if to clear it, but all he could focus on was her, the reality of her.

I love these lines!

I don't know if you really need to write another part, but I'd love to read it if you do decide to continue.

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Date: 2005-08-19 01:35 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
Yay, glad you liked! I have been reading Murakami novels lately, and I think he's seeping into my writing. XD Thanks so much for commenting!

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Date: 2005-08-19 01:37 pm (UTC)
troisroyaumes: Painting of a duck, with the hanzi for "summer" in the top left (Default)
From: [personal profile] troisroyaumes
Oops, the above was me. >_<;;

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Date: 2005-08-19 04:14 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aishuu.livejournal.com
I liked this one. It seems very Yukino and Arima, the kind of inevitable tide towards each other they move to. Arima is much more mature in this than the series, and I like the thought they'd be able to take some time to grow up.

Nice.

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Date: 2005-08-19 01:48 pm (UTC)
troisroyaumes: Painting of a duck, with the hanzi for "summer" in the top left (Default)
From: [personal profile] troisroyaumes
Thanks very much Aishuu! XD Actually you wrote the first Karekano fic I ever read, so it means a lot to hear that you liked it. ^_^

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Date: 2005-08-19 02:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aishuu.livejournal.com
*g* I only wrote one Kare Kano fic EVER.... I keep thinking that someday, I'll dp the sequel, but that hasn't happened.

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Date: 2005-08-19 07:09 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] schwimmerin.livejournal.com
Dedicated to little me??? Awww ribosome *big squishy bear hug* I really liked it! And the first paragraph, I totally know how that feels :)

Dedicated to schwimmerin, with whom I will never run out of words to share, written or otherwise

I...I don't know what to say...I'm so touched (this sounds really sappy so I will conclude): ♥

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Date: 2005-08-19 01:50 pm (UTC)
troisroyaumes: Painting of a duck, with the hanzi for "summer" in the top left (Default)
From: [personal profile] troisroyaumes
::hugs back:: Yay! I definitely looked at that first paragraph and thought, yeah, Jenny will understand this. ^___________^

I feel odd replying to you in comments when I'm talking to you on AIM. Hahaha, Internet multitasking. XD

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Date: 2005-08-19 11:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] svz-insanity.livejournal.com
You wrote Kare Kano! *is in awed*

I love your word choice and how you describe them slowly drifting apart. It's lovely, and it'll be in my head for the rest of the day. ^_^ Thank you for writing it.

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Date: 2005-08-19 01:51 pm (UTC)
troisroyaumes: Painting of a duck, with the hanzi for "summer" in the top left (Default)
From: [personal profile] troisroyaumes
Aww, thank you! Very glad to hear you liked it. ^_^

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